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Brain rot, it's a bitch.

Journal Entry: Sun May 16, 2004, 12:12 AM
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Yeah, you see?

Devious Information

  • Current Age: 18 (Hi-Fuckin-Ho)
  • Current Residence: That little tingle in the back of your head
  • Interests: Clowns, Jesters, Jack-O-Lanterns, Wolves, Ghosts, puppets, and all things that go bump in the night
  • Favourite movie: Donnie Darko
  • Favourite band or musician: Trail of the Dead
  • Favourite genre of music: Anything loud, angry, and violent. So teen pop all the way
  • Favourite artist: Brom, Chad Savage, Giger, Derek Hess
  • Favourite poet or writer: Edgar
  • Favourite photographer: Will Navidson
  • Favourite style of art: Religous Pornography
  • Operating System: Angst FU -5.0
  • MP3 player of choice: Indigionous (Is that how you spell it?)
  • Shell of choice: The one i'm in. It's comfy
  • Wallpaper of choice: Zombo The Clown
  • Skin of choice: Hannible's Spring Line
  • Favourite game: Playing "Doctor"
  • Favourite gaming platform: My Abacus, fast and easy downloads
  • Favourite cartoon character: DivX, because who can't get enough of a drunken, abusive, obsolete piece of entertainment hardware?
  • Personal Quote: Tomorrow can't come fast enough to erase yesterday
  • Tools of the Trade: Mutual Masturbation, in the vocal sense

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~onewordatatime:icononewordatatime: Jun 3, 2004, 2:48:09 PM
I think your writing has lots of potential. You're especially good with description. Sometimes your use of language is a little inconsistent, and you tend to use passive voice too much. But this is something that can be fixed just by writing a lot more, figuring what you're good at, and strengthening your weaker points.

One thing I want you to consider is specific detail, where you need it and where you don't. For instance, in one piece you have lots of details that feels extraneaous, but in the other, you don't have hardly any.

I really wish you had more pieces up, just so I had a broader idea of your writing.

My final suggestion is just keep writing! You will no doubt learn from it. I can tell you have a love for words, and that's the best starting point. :)

Ach, ja! :gummybear:

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`peskaa:iconpeskaa: May 22, 2004, 12:57:48 PM
Hello there. :aww:

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`tangledweb:icontangledweb: May 7, 2004, 11:21:21 PM
Thanks for the comment and watch...nothing wrong with sounding like a critic you know. ;)

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~vanity-insecurity:iconvanity-insecurity: May 1, 2004, 11:39:32 PM
thanks for the comment :)
welcome to DA pal

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~LittleBastad:iconLittleBastad: Apr 30, 2004, 10:30:34 PM
Greetings, good sir. Thy token of friendship is accepted, heh.
~Bedsidespider:iconBedsidespider: Apr 27, 2004, 8:27:35 PM
Welcome to da! =D

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